I had to write a paragraph in school using vocabulart words. The underlined words are the vocabulary words. Here is the paragraph:

After glancing at his room, John realized the room needed some work. John could no longer take the oblique pictures and cracked walls, so he set off to the mall. A tool store was his first stop in the mall. John wanted tools that would last for a while and not get worn out easily, so he went to the durable tools section. After that stop, John headed over to a poster shop. On the wall, John saw pictures of his idol, Elvis Presley, who he has always venerated and admired. John then walked over to a home decor store. While he was there, John tried out a massage chair. Although John enjoyed the massage very much, he was a frugal person and would never spend money on a luxury item. At the end of the day, John walked out of the mall with some tools, posters, and a relaxed back.

I was wondering if this paragraph looks good. Grammer, usage, and mechanics count, so is this a good paragrah (as in no mistakes). Thank you.