when i groe up i want to be a famoos author for adult science fiction books. so im starting out young. for my paper i have "Dog Food" as my topic. engoy.
i have a dog named spark. he has spots. he is cute. i love him. he has spots.every day i bath him. hes really nice and likes it. then he eats DOG FOOD. i love him. when hes older ill make him a cop dog. he is a chihuahua. i think hez awesome. hes also funny. he loves dog food. when i grow up im gonna be a doctor. i hop you engoyed reading my paper. i hope you learnede about dog food. then end.
be as mean and serious as u are. even if i get a B-! idc i want the truth. is this a A+ or B- or other? tell me
Update:is she right? should i write part 2? oh yeah and subscribe or whatever you do so u can see all my questions!
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Is this a joke? This paper is not even worthy of a D!
I would recommend adding tons more detail IF this isn't a false paper. Make your reader smell the food, taste the food, see the food - appeal to all of the senses! Also, don't add unnecessary information: "when i grow up im gonna be a doctor" is just one example in your paper. Get STRAIGHT to the point; readers don't like it when they're dragged along with pointless words.
Spell everything right too! Capitalize words at the start of sentences and try to use semicolons and hyphens.
Good luck. Work hard - you've got a lot of work to do.
EDIT: Please don't write a part two unless it's for your assignment. Improve on what you have first!
use correct capitalization and punctuation. its bathe not bath. enjoyed not engoyed. dog food shouldn't be in caps. name a specific dog food. use longer sentences than 3-5 words. let me give you can example of the first sentence:
I own and love an adorable dog named Spark. He's a (name type of dog) at the age of ___.
get the idea? more specifics and longer interesting sentences.
OMG that was a AAA+++++++ i love that story!!!! ur gonna be soooo famous and like u should totally write like another story like Part 2 Cat Food!!!!!!!!!!!
D-. Use full sentences and maybe you'll get a B(or B+).
seriously.?
that is like everything our teachers told us not to do when writing an essay.
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That was bad
That is like kindergarten work!
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