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Personally, I like it. It's not like amazingly written or anything, but it is direct and straightforward. I feel as though I can hear your voice when I read it. I wouldn't change a thing if I were you.

The good: You sound well educated, driven and your curiosity about the subject really shines. You show that you have had background in this subject and you elaborate on exactly what thoughts led you to think about your major.

The bad: John's Hopkins will expect a more well written essay than this. The organization could be fine tuned as well as some of your word choice. It's important to keep things simple, but at the same time you want to show you skills as a writer: clear, concise but still well-written.

Good luck.

It's a decent essay. Your point is made but the language used is a bit simplistic. If I knew why you were writing the essay in the first place I could better evaluate it. You might want to consider using some higher level vocabulary or sentence structure. As it is now, the essay just seems a bit simple or plain.

I think it needs a better intro and like a previous poster said, the language seems very simplistic.