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Wow! I'm really impressed - especially because you are just 13. Make sure you spell check though and watch grammar. It's intelligence, stare, replies, and when you use the contraction "I'm" you have to change awaken to past tense - awakened. But way to go! Keep writing. :)

almost as good as this one..

Roses are red

Violets are blue

Sugar is sweet

But not as sweet as you

BUT...

the roses have wilted

and the sugar is lumpy

just like your head

no just kidding its good for a 13 yr old even older...and if you write poems and just not that one, there are a few websites where people and can write and submit poems for free one is Love Poetry.com and the other is I dont know off hand the wewbsite but is called Stare Lite cafe maybe ""Light""" google it, you will find it..

Well, dear, it's more of a sign that you're in love than it is a poem. Fortunately, though, since you're only 13, it's only a dream. And it's a nice thought, too. Keep at it!

Keep on writing! It's really good stuff. It's a good poem!

Good!

Keep writing, even if you are the only one to enjoy your talent.

(BTW, use the word 'stare' for looking at someone, not 'stair')

Best of luck!

That is really good! Keep on writing and I'll comment every time!

I liked it till the part about laughing at a funeral.

that is a really good poem. was this an assignment for school or just for fun? i really like it. great job!

your 13 i am so going to report you!!!

and i think your poem is good!!

omg your 13

OMG THATS AMAZING!!!! i feel the same way all the time!! its like your readin my mind!!