Life Advisor
Elias Rosatso is a simple man, and, simple men are easily satisfied. It was for this reason that Rosatso’s face is in an almost permanent state of contentment. Eleanor Ostasor however did not share this admirable trait. The reason Miss Eleanor Ostasor didn’t share this trait was because she happened to be Rosatso’s Life Advisor. Life Advisors had been put in place by the government shortly after the assassination of President Jack Flint in 2038. In a statement made by Flint’s successor this was “To assure this doesn’t happen again” which roughly translates as I don’t want to be assassinated. Perhaps the earlier description of Rosatso being a simple man was unfair, perhaps a more apt description is that Rosatso was a simple man. Life Advisors was a name coined by the government, a more valid name might have been Life Instructor as advisor suggests that Rosatso and those like him had a choice in the matter, which they didn’t. I only mention this because had Rosatso had a choice then he might not have been such a simple man.
Rosatso was around 5 foot 9, around 34 years of age, had around black hair and weighed around 12 stone. I say around because both Rosatso and Ostasor were past caring about such unimportant things and in Ostasor’s case most things in general. Important things to Rosatso were things such as the day he realised his and his life instructors names were palindromes of one another and the time a red squirrel had made it’s way into ‘his’ house. Like most new programs put in place by the government this program of someone controlling another person through means of drugging and hypnotism had it’s flaws. Perhaps the most key flaw of this we’re about to encounter.
Update:Thanks for your answer i will look at changing it however it isn't a typo i originally say he is a simple man then say he was basically his life advisor made him simple. I Agree i was unsure whether to write around black hair.
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Your prose seems a bit like an imitation of late-19th-century texts. Were you going for that? I sort of like it myself, but I find it sort of long-winded, at least in some places. You can have the aura of a 19th century text without repeating yourself so much:
"Elias Rosatso was a simple man, and was thus easily satisfied. There was rarely a day when contentment didn't bloom upon his on his handsome visage. Eleanor Ostasor, however, did not share this carefree contentment, for she happened to be Rostatso's Life Adviser."
What I have isn't exactly worthy of Arthur Conan Doyle or whoever, but in my opinion, you don't have to make your sentences slaves to structure. Say what you have to say in as few words as possible and don't repeat yourself unnecessarily. Also, I think if you're going to talk about the contentment on Mr. Rosatso's face, you should describe it more.
I also think you have a typo: you say it's unfair to describe Rosatso as "a simple man" and that maybe he is more of a "simple man." Oops? Also, what's "around black hair"? You try to explain it, but what the hell does it mean? Doesn't make any sense to me at all.