Grade a poem (A-F) por favor?
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She still has the same eyes
Straw hair curled around.
Winter arrives all too quietly
I forget my jacket when going outside.
The eye of the snowstorm is not glorious
Only jealous, focused.
She had the eye of a snowstorm in middle school
She could’ve sworn his eyes flitted, changed form.
I hold the mouse in my palm,
And draw a lady that doesn’t exist
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i had to love this, because of the fact there are segments/ bits of it I did get a feeling of, yet as provided i think of it particularly is somewhat disjointed. i'm pleased with metaphors, yet mixing them could be perplexing to a pair, and distract from the piece, IE: Gumdrops and Lollipops??? i'd have used "became into" instead of "God" ferry by city??? waiting on the shore? In a city? i'm a crimson head so because it is all I bearing directly to hence a techniques. Phlegm??? and what's firewater a metaphor for? then you definitely introduce a pinball gadget??? know by utilising flavor is that meant to narrate to fireside water or...? final 2 traces, unexpectedly the Sahara? Is that a personification? final line as bearing directly to the only above is what i'd save and build an entire piece around those.
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