How is my poem so far?

This is my first poem since grade school. I feel it is clustered. Could you give me tips or advice? And feedback- let me know how you feel about it. Okay here it is.

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There lived a silly little girl

Who was faced with the problems of the world

Hunger and poverty, racism and bullying

She saw the world was a sick place

Not one for a girl like her

Glittering eyes full of smiles is what they saw

But this little girl is easy to believe

Way deep down inside they will find there was something much more

Could they not see it?

Could they not hear it?

With the limp in her step

And crackle in her voice

They were clueless

Now as she ages she sees the flashbacks of her past

She hid it all so well

Was that good?

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That's where I stopped should that be the end or should I add more? I can't think of anything else right now. Please give me some feedback! Thanks so much guys.

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