poem review????????????????????????????
this is my poem about me and my bestfriend growing apart.im 12 and been doing this for a year
here it is:
Im not the only one who sees
we are growing apart
but im the only one who feels
my breaking heart
we thought bestfriends forever would last
but its seems forever has gone by to fast
THANKS FOR LISTENING.... OR SEEING... OR WHATEVER!!! WHAT DO YA THINK????? AND WHAT ABOUT A TITLE?????
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It's pretty good, I'm sorry but it sounds like something is just missing... Maybe after a little more practice you'll get it....
I'm 13 and have been writing for 3 years, i know it can be frustrating and flustering but you'll get the hang of it, I'm proud of you! I love seeing young writers!
I think you should change the "we" in L5 to "I". Overall, it's nice. Try adding a few more stanzas of the pattern ABCBDD.
i think it's ok but maybe think of something else instead of "my beaking heart" it seems to short, and maybe the title could be " Falling apart"
its good for ur age, maybe make it longer