As i hold your hand...all my dreams unfold
as you let go,my dreams go untold
The meaning of my existence,is to keep you satisfied and proud
but some were in between,i, i let you down...
I appoglize for my wrongs,i can never have another first impression
but if i was given a second chance,it would be one you never would end up regretting
I was blind i couldnt see, i was struck with my own immaturity
the blames on me,but with every wrong comes purity
Forgive my negatives,and see my positive side
because for you i wear my heart on my sleeve,for you my emotions never hide
I made a mistake,a regret,and a lesson was learned
but within my heart i still have the sudden urge...
Its my regret..but your hard to forget
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You have written well but couldn't shape it into a poem. It seems just like a good piece of writing not poem. Please don't get disheartened from my criticism. You can still make it better.
That's really good and heart-wrenching.
However, the rhythm is off. The first two lines are 10 and 9 beats. The next line is 17 and 11. It keeps changing!
And the "I, I let you down..." is kind of cheesy. Unless you put it into a song it sounds off. Try add a different word somewhere in there or take it out.
But I love it, otherwise! Keep up the good work! ^_^