Is this prologue good so far?
"Merry Christmas Gabrielle." Jason's velvet voice whispered in my ear sending chills down my spine.
"Is it really you?" I ask sobs escaping my mouth and my voice cracking.
Just tell me if it is good and give me feedback or advice. Thanks!
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This is barely even a prologue
Also, there are a few grammar mistakes. Like...
"Is it really you?" I ask sobs escaping my mouth and my voice cracking.
it should be:
"Is it really you?" I ask, sobs escaping my mouth as my voice cracked.
This is just two lines. From this, I don't get anything at all. What am I looking for? Add more then ask again.