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Queen Elizabeth I once stated: “I know I have the body but of a weak and feeble woman; but I have the heart and stomach [spirit] of a king, and of a king of England too” (Hinds 11). Elizabeth I knew she was destined for greatness the moment she ascended the throne because she had the blood of the great King Henry VIII in her veins. She was a great Queen who achieved many political, religious and combative accomplishments for the nation of England. Elizabeth I changed the course of history because she played a powerful role in converting England to Protestantism, defeated the Spanish Armada, and broadened the minds of her countrymen by making them accessible to the common man.
Should I add in details about the spanish armada, supporting literature and her religious accomplishments or leave it as is? Thanks!
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expand, the more useless information you add to the paragraph the smarter you sound,
I would not keep referring to her as Elizabeth I. The first time you name her, it is reasonable to do this but after that is is repetitive and unnecessary.